Shawn L. Bird

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poem-invisibility November 16, 2018

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 11:50 pm
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You have to pour paint

over your transparency,

if you want to be visible.

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poem-The Poetry Retreat is Over July 9, 2017

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 7:05 pm
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The Poetry Retreat is Over

I am the last to leave.

The GPS battery is dead;

I don’t know where to go from here.

 

poem- gentle October 27, 2015

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 8:55 am
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In your gentle embrace

everything that overwhelms

is erased.

 

poem- springing March 28, 2015

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 4:47 pm
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Little horns of sunshine

exclaiming on my table,

‘Daffodils mean spring!’

 

poem- 3 things March 25, 2015

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 11:07 am
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On her blog @SarahDoughty prompted:

Tell me a story covering three things:

  1. a promise
  2. why you write
  3. a passion

This was my response.  Not exactly a story, but you know, brevity is an art! 🙂  What’s your response?  Go check out her blog and leave a thought.

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I do; I do
release the stories,
my dreams of you.

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POETRY LESSON:

I feel like I need to take this moment to point out what is going on in this poem, because while there are only 3 lines and eleven words, they are woven tightly using a variety of poetic technique.  First, while each line responds in order to Sarah’s 3 prompts, they also read as one sentence, so there are overlapping meanings.  Secondly, there is a pattern of 4-3-4 words.  Thirdly, repetition in the first line is quite emphatic, but provides a rhyme that tightens the ending with you.  

Fourthly, I get seriously carried away with the sound devices assonance and consonance, binding each component of the words to their fellows.  There are three vowels sounds repeated, the only out-lier is the ‘o’ in stories. e.g. I, I, my; do, do, you; release, stories, dreams; the, of.  (Reminder: assonance is repetition of a vowel sound, NOT a letter).  The consonant sounds also repeat with do, do, dreams; release, stories, dreams; release, stories, dreams; my dreams.  The the and of  are both *fricatives, and so while not exactly the same sound, the brain hears them as ‘close enough.’

Finally, that leaves  only the ‘l’ is without a partner, except visually–because I,I,l look the same, don’t they?  And of course, the lonely o from stories, visually matches the o’s in do.  In other words, every component of each word is tied somehow to the rest of the poem.  Absolutely everything fits like a tight puzzle.

Did I do any of this intentionally?  No, actually.  I just responded to the prompt, tidied it up until I liked it, and then when I copied it here, I noticed how tight it was.

*Fricatives in English are f,v, s (both s/z sounds), th (both θ and ð).

 

poem-orb October 9, 2014

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 5:44 pm
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A  huge silver orb is

suspended in the mist

and glistens on the lake.

 

it was all hazy, and the sun was a huge silver orb hanging in mist. I should start carrying my camera again.

 

poem- falling October 4, 2014

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 9:35 am
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So many questions

falling like leaves

that I can not ask.

 

 
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