Shawn L. Bird

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poem- you in a crowd October 3, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 5:55 am
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I see you

in the distance

across a roomful of heads,

tall and silent

watching them with a

pleasant blankness-

a smile that turns your mouth

but doesn’t light your eyes.

You stand above

conversation,

listening without interest,

putting in the time

required for politeness.

My eyes call to you

and you turn,

one eyebrow raises a greeting

and your lips rise with it,

I see the flash of gladness,

as you incline your head

and step toward my love.

 

16 Responses to “poem- you in a crowd”

  1. timthepoet's avatar timthepoet Says:

    It’s great but hey, you know that. 🙂

  2. enjoyed this! loved the line, “a smile that turns your mouth but doesn’t light your eyes.”

  3. Cyan Ryan's avatar hakariconstant Says:

    Reminds me of a song/music video by one of my favorite bands, Silversun Pickups, titled “Lazy Eye”. Great poem!

  4. Ezekiel Fish's avatar Ezekiel Fish Says:

    I sense feelings here of social awkwardness, wanting only to keep company with those close. Much to think about in this. Nice.

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    • Shyness, superiority, boredom, distraction… Lots of possible reasons.

      • lordrumfish's avatar lordrumfish Says:

        It reminds me of me: I’m tall and I don’t do well at parties from some mixture of awkwardness or social anxiety or something. Of course, my suspension of disbelief breaks when someone beckons me across the room with love in her eyes, so the similarities end there. =P

        On a more serious note, I liked the poem, I felt a connection with the person being observed.

      • lol! I hope you find your better half, who will make your eyes twinkle across a room! 🙂

  5. leiflife's avatar leiflife Says:

    Lovely poetry… Glad to find your blog… Thank you for visiting and liking mine.

  6. macjam47's avatar macjam47 Says:

    Beautiful! Wonderful image.

  7. loved this one and the line “a smile that turns your mouth but doesn’t light your eyes” Stunning.


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