Shawn L. Bird

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poem- fractured October 29, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 6:46 pm
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I know

you’re broken.

I see the fracture lines

behind your eyes

I feel the seepage

leaking from the crack in your soul.

I have

needle, thread

glue

and hope.

I’ll share.

 

25 Responses to “poem- fractured”

  1. trentonleetiemeyer Says:
    October 29, 2013 at 6:47 pm

    I would have offered duct tape.

    Reply
  2. words4jp Says:
    October 29, 2013 at 7:04 pm

    This is such a beautiful and meaningful piece. Such loving and encouraging words.

    Reply
  4. Joel Says:
    October 29, 2013 at 7:31 pm

    Lovin’ the love. 🙂

    Reply
  5. Freeda Baker Nichols Says:
    October 29, 2013 at 8:55 pm

    I like your poem. “see the fracture through your eyes” a good line. Eyes tell so much more than words.

    Reply
    • Shawn L. Bird Says:
      October 29, 2013 at 9:14 pm

      lol Still looking at that line, I confess. I’m pondering “see the fracture lines in your eyes” Hmm. Which do you prefer? Nice thing about digital publishing.

      Thanks for stopping in!

      Reply
      • Freeda Baker Nichols Says:
        October 30, 2013 at 7:15 am

        I didn’t mean for you to change the line. I understood she “saw the fracture (of the soul, heart) through your eyes.” I prefer this line as you first shared it. Thanks.

      • Shawn L. Bird Says:
        October 30, 2013 at 8:23 am

        It wasn’t quite right, and the change better reflects what I was visualizing: a fracture line visible when you look at the eyes- you know that slightly haunted expression? My blog poetry is always mutable.

  6. Chess Says:
    October 29, 2013 at 10:29 pm

    What a beautiful expression of love.

    Reply
  7. brianspillman Says:
    October 30, 2013 at 12:05 am

    The . After the word broken… Perfect.

    Reply
  8. davidprosser Says:
    October 30, 2013 at 12:42 am

    That’s Love.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

    Reply
  9. syl65 Says:
    October 30, 2013 at 7:07 am

    Sharing hope, I like that.

    Reply
  10. Lauren Nalls Says:
    October 30, 2013 at 7:46 am

    I like “behind” like they are hidden

    Reply

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