Shawn L. Bird

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poem- fractured October 29, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 6:46 pm
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I know

you’re broken.

I see the fracture lines

behind your eyes

I feel the seepage

leaking from the crack in your soul.

I have

needle, thread

glue

and hope.

I’ll share.

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25 Responses to “poem- fractured”

  1. I would have offered duct tape.

  2. words4jp Says:

    This is such a beautiful and meaningful piece. Such loving and encouraging words.

  3. Joel Says:

    Lovin’ the love. 🙂

  4. I like your poem. “see the fracture through your eyes” a good line. Eyes tell so much more than words.

    • lol Still looking at that line, I confess. I’m pondering “see the fracture lines in your eyes” Hmm. Which do you prefer? Nice thing about digital publishing.

      Thanks for stopping in!

      • I didn’t mean for you to change the line. I understood she “saw the fracture (of the soul, heart) through your eyes.” I prefer this line as you first shared it. Thanks.

      • It wasn’t quite right, and the change better reflects what I was visualizing: a fracture line visible when you look at the eyes- you know that slightly haunted expression? My blog poetry is always mutable.

  5. Chess Says:

    What a beautiful expression of love.

  6. The . After the word broken… Perfect.

  7. davidprosser Says:

    That’s Love.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

  8. syl65 Says:

    Sharing hope, I like that.

  9. Lauren Nalls Says:

    I like “behind” like they are hidden


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