Shawn L. Bird

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poem- beautiful October 27, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 9:43 am
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I love you

I want to be with you

he said

but I can’t ever call you beautiful

I’ll say lovely

and that’s better

She nodded uncertainly

wondering what that meant

Years later

she reminded him of his words.

I was an ass,

he said.

But he still could not

bring himself

to say the word.

 

15 Responses to “poem- beautiful”

  1. I feel like I just “liked” someone’s post about a tragedy on Facebook. I appreciate this beautiful poem, it IS beautiful, but so very, very tragic… I don’t “like” tragedy per se.

  2. Kat Says:

    Well written 🙂 thanks for sharing this

  3. timthepoet Says:

    It’s a bit sad this one. I think he’s still an ass.

  4. deanabo Says:

    This makes me wonder what kind of life they led together. If he was not able to call her beautiful what else could he not do with her?

    I love the type of words that make me think. Very good writing.

  5. Beauty is one of those words most people underrate. It encompasses so much: respect, loyalty, appreciation…even Love. But to admire beauty you have to submit to it, and that’s why it’s recognition is so rare. I really thought this post is one of your best.

    • What a wise observation, Amos: We must submit to beauty. I usually think of embracing beauty or appreciating it, but we do submit in so many denotations and connotations of that word. Thank you. I’ll ponder that for a while.

  6. toad (chris jensen) Says:

    Reblogged this on tot123itsme.

  7. Michael Lane Says:

    This is great… the knotty “story” here is very interesting.

  8. Jo Says:

    That is quite sad. I’m not sure for whom


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