Shawn L. Bird

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Poem-Fire of you July 10, 2011

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:47 am
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This poem was written as a submission to the Burnaby Writers Society Poetry contest.  The theme was fire, and poets were encouraged to interpret the theme.  Still 2 months before winners will be announced.  

September 2011: This one was a contest finalist! Yay!

.

You reached

into the flames

and  plucked an ember

that glowed with

happiness and hope

upon your palm.

.

In the

wavering sphere

of gold and crimson

light, I glimpsed our

future in flickering

depths.

.

But when I reached to take it in my grasp

you clasped

your fist closed,

so the glow

of my hope

spilled

from

your

fingers.

.

“No,” you said.

“It will burn you.”

.

Truth scorched through

the kindness in your eyes, but could not

extinguish my anguish,

even as you wrapped me in your arms

and murmured worthless words of consolation.

.

I didn’t want your wisdom.

I wanted fire.

 

28 Responses to “Poem-Fire of you”

  1. Vikki Says:

    Exquisite. We can be fools for fire.

  2. Vikki Says:

    This fits in Grace. Especialy end of Book 1.

  3. robin Says:

    powerful words. i re-read more than once… nice. -robin http://mysecretinnuendo.com

  4. Awesome! A wonderful depiction of the pain of a love desired and not attained!

  5. Jingle Says:

    superb.
    love the imagery
    welcome back, Happy Potluck.

  6. hey neat. this is really good. I do dig it.

  7. Mr. Watson Says:

    This is great! Love ur style!

  8. great piece and good visual

  9. Debbie Says:

    Wow – well done, well conveyed –

    Debbie, Razzle, Indy, Owen and Paisley

  10. Reblogged this on Shawn L. Bird and commented:

    Another re-post of an old favourite, as I try to get some words done on my CampNaNoWriMo project!

  11. Geo Sans Says:

    w o w

    ~

    brilliant last lines

  12. quarksire Says:

    trippy, an yup a bittersweet one it be:)…chow….Q

  13. Mike Says:

    Superb. The clarity of the metaphor carries the reader into your emotional capillaries and the allegorical phrasing beautifully exposes the poetic narrative. Very well done – conceptionally and artistically.

  14. irinadim Says:

    Beautiful! And congratulations on being the finalist!

    • I so rarely enter contests, because everything I write, I write for the blog, and then it’s considered ‘published’ and ineligible for submission. ;-S

      • there are many places to submit poems that do not count personal blogs as publication. most of them specify in their guidelines. i like this poem…it reminds me of something i wrote last year, which i half want to put on my blog, and half want to save until i hear back… but i have a good classified page i look at regularly for calls for submissions. it’s called “new pages” and is probably easily found with a search, if you are interested.

      • Thanks for the link!

  15. Heartafire Says:

    Reblogged this on Heartafire's Blog.

  16. Wow! This has me in awe 🙂 Loved it… and how the glow of hope spills from fingers, could actually visualize it.. beautiful, thanks for sharing this 🙂

  17. erbiage Says:

    oh, that fire! that’s what it means to be alive


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