This poem was written as a submission to the Burnaby Writers Society Poetry contest. The theme was fire, and poets were encouraged to interpret the theme. Still 2 months before winners will be announced.
September 2011: This one was a contest finalist! Yay!
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You reached
into the flames
and plucked an ember
that glowed with
happiness and hope
upon your palm.
.
In the
wavering sphere
of gold and crimson
light, I glimpsed our
future in flickering
depths.
.
But when I reached to take it in my grasp
you clasped
your fist closed,
so the glow
of my hope
spilled
from
your
fingers.
.
“No,” you said.
“It will burn you.”
.
Truth scorched through
the kindness in your eyes, but could not
extinguish my anguish,
even as you wrapped me in your arms
and murmured worthless words of consolation.
.
I didn’t want your wisdom.
I wanted fire.
Exquisite. We can be fools for fire.
This fits in Grace. Especialy end of Book 1.
lol Welllll… Same muse + same author = same story. A whole life of re-telling in variation after variation. What can I say?
powerful words. i re-read more than once… nice. -robin http://mysecretinnuendo.com
Awesome! A wonderful depiction of the pain of a love desired and not attained!
superb.
love the imagery
welcome back, Happy Potluck.
So bittersweet.
Nicely done!
Here’s mine:
http://mypoetcharm.blogspot.com/2011/07/stars-have-winked-at-you.html
hey neat. this is really good. I do dig it.
This is great! Love ur style!
great piece and good visual
Wow – well done, well conveyed –
Debbie, Razzle, Indy, Owen and Paisley
Reblogged this on Shawn L. Bird and commented:
Another re-post of an old favourite, as I try to get some words done on my CampNaNoWriMo project!
w o w
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brilliant last lines
Thanks 🙂 I spent quite a while on that one.
trippy, an yup a bittersweet one it be:)…chow….Q
Thanks
Superb. The clarity of the metaphor carries the reader into your emotional capillaries and the allegorical phrasing beautifully exposes the poetic narrative. Very well done – conceptionally and artistically.
Thank you. I was quite proud of it! 🙂
Beautiful! And congratulations on being the finalist!
I so rarely enter contests, because everything I write, I write for the blog, and then it’s considered ‘published’ and ineligible for submission. ;-S
there are many places to submit poems that do not count personal blogs as publication. most of them specify in their guidelines. i like this poem…it reminds me of something i wrote last year, which i half want to put on my blog, and half want to save until i hear back… but i have a good classified page i look at regularly for calls for submissions. it’s called “new pages” and is probably easily found with a search, if you are interested.
Thanks for the link!
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Wow! This has me in awe 🙂 Loved it… and how the glow of hope spills from fingers, could actually visualize it.. beautiful, thanks for sharing this 🙂
Thanks. It’s an oldie, but a goodie! Hard to format poetry in WordPress, since they compress everything!
You’re welcome 🙂 oldies are have their own charm! I enjoy your poetry 🙂
oh, that fire! that’s what it means to be alive
Indeed.