Shawn L. Bird

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Poem-Fire of you July 10, 2011

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:47 am
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This poem was written as a submission to the Burnaby Writers Society Poetry contest.  The theme was fire, and poets were encouraged to interpret the theme.  Still 2 months before winners will be announced.  

September 2011: This one was a contest finalist! Yay!

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You reached

into the flames

and  plucked an ember

that glowed with

happiness and hope

upon your palm.

.

In the

wavering sphere

of gold and crimson

light, I glimpsed our

future in flickering

depths.

.

But when I reached to take it in my grasp

you clasped

your fist closed,

so the glow

of my hope

spilled

from

your

fingers.

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“No,” you said.

“It will burn you.”

.

Truth scorched through

the kindness in your eyes, but could not

extinguish my anguish,

even as you wrapped me in your arms

and murmured worthless words of consolation.

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I didn’t want your wisdom.

I wanted fire.

 

keeping track of time July 9, 2011

Filed under: Grace Awakening,Writing — Shawn L. Bird @ 2:23 pm
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When I was writing Grace Awakening, I didn’t write linearly, I wrote scenes from all over the book.  I moved from exposition to climax and into rising action in the same week.   This technique helps to keep the writing from being boring, and makes it interesting toward the end of the process when the author must take all these disparate puzzle pieces of story and manoeuvre them into a proper picture.

It creates some difficulties as well, however.  The main one is keeping references to time appropriate.  If I say “two weeks later” but the events referenced have 3 Fridays between them, I have to fix it!  Or perhaps the logical sequence puts a spring activity in December.  My biggest consideration was working around the date April 6th, when Petrarch first met Laura.  The scene that references that must occur at that time.  The last couple of days I’ve been working with an editor on finding these time anomalies and making sure it all works together.

It’s kind of interesting that in some 40+ reads I’ve had of the book, and a dozen or so beta readers, no one else has caught these concerns before.  I realise this means that not everyone is going to keep track of the calendar, but for those who do, it’s important that it matches up.  So I’ve drafted a calendar, and made sure all the events sit where they should.  Just as I researched the times for the sunset when Grace and Ben dine at the Calgary Tower, the little things need to be correct.  It’s a respectful nod to the reader.  “I care enough about you to create a world that is consistent.”

At least, I’m doing my best.

 

Bird in the hand… July 8, 2011

Filed under: Pondering — Shawn L. Bird @ 11:50 pm
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Do you ever watch Deal or No Deal?  As the competitors decide whether to accept the offer that the bank makes for their suitcase, or to keep raising (or lowering) the stakes by choosing other cases to open, the tension in the studio rises.

Today I ignored the bird in my hand, and I have chosen to wait in a bush for the bird hiding there.  There is no guarantee that the bird will wait around in the bush for me, or that someone else won’t come along and snatch it away from me.  It’s a very nice bird though, and so I’m gambling a bit.  In the last few years most of my gambles have worked out.

So, No Deal!  I’ll ramp  up the tension just a little more.

How about you?  Do you like to stick with the bird in your hand, or do you risk waiting for a bird fluttering out of reach in a bush?

 

Zadie Smith July 7, 2011

Filed under: Writing — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:20 am
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I like this alphabet introduction to Zadie Smith who is a Penguin author.  I like the framework that she has used to tell us something about herself.  It makes me ponder how I could use a similar framework for myself, but I’m too busy editing at the moment, so enjoy Zadie’s for now, instead.

http://www.penguin.co.uk/nf/Author/AuthorPage/0,,1000049267,00.html?sym=MIS

 

Summer haiku July 6, 2011

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:32 am
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Pine trees dance with wind

waving their limbs and swirling

 to a summer song.

 

The Cat Years July 5, 2011

Filed under: Commentary — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:25 am
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Over the years, when I’ve been teaching grade eight or nine, I’ve printed off The Cat Years by Sid Burns to leave in the waiting area at Parent Teacher conference time.  Parents come up to me, clutching the paper and asking, “Is this true?  Will it end?”  They thank me profusely for giving them this lovely little metaphorical piece  that puts adolescence into such clear view.  It gives them hope that their adolescent child will grow out of the surly insolence and anti-parent behaviors that cause them so much distress.  I generally tell them that they can expect their dog back sometime in grade 10, and they leave with hope in their breasts.  Hope provides the power to endure.  Enjoy the piece by clicking the link above.

 

in spite of themselves July 4, 2011

Filed under: anecdotes,Commentary — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:21 am
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Yesterday I touched on a common thing with 13-14 year olds, that they have to challenge the adults and complain.  It’s nothing personal, it’s just their way of asserting their autonomy, even if it hurts them more than anyone else.

We have an old family video that illustrates this well.  I’m a baby, so my brother is about 14.  The family is off to Vancouver Island to  spend time at my dad’s company cabin on Long Beach, in what is now Pacific Rim National Park.   While the rest of the family sits out in the wind enjoying the ferry ride, bro is sitting inside with a comic book, ignoring everyone else.   When the camera comes near him, he scowls.  Later, I’m toddling along the shore, my sister is playing with a dingy in the waves with a friend, and again, bro is reading a comic and scowling.  After several days, he was finally bored with his comics and went exploring.  He met an old beach comber who let him tag along.  Bro was fascinated by this old guy and his stories.  When it came time to go, he scowled because he had to leave.  When we watch the video and tease him about this, he says, “I was stupid.  I don’t know what I was thinking.”

I do.  He was being a poster boy for the oppositional nature of adolescence.

The last week of school I arranged a game for my class.  The worst whiner grumbled as usual.  I made him play the game.  He participated, laughed and had fun.  Afterwards, I pointed out that because he complained so much, he missed out on things he’d really enjoy.  He smirked and admitted that he knew that.  He observed that sometimes his parents force him to do things, and when he finds himself enjoying the activity, he has to make a point of complaining a bit so they ‘don’t think they won.’

That just about sums it up, doesn’t it?  Opposition for the sake of opposition!  Thankfully, sometime around their 15th birthdays they discover they can assert their own autonomy without opposing everyone else’s.  That’s when they reach maturity.

Just like a fruit that looks as if it’s ripe, adolescence needs a little sour time to properly develop into sweet maturity.

 

The Middle Planet July 3, 2011

Filed under: Commentary — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:22 am
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For the last year, I have been working in a Middle School teaching grades six, seven and eight.  For the eighteen years previous, I have worked in Secondary Schools teaching grades eight to twelve.  I have worked with Girl Guides of Middle School age level and I had taught grade eight in high school, so I figured it would be a fairly straight forward adjustment.  It wasn’t.

It was strangely reminiscent of my year as an exchange student.  The mantra definitely applied:  Not better, not worse, just different.

I learned a lot from my year on Planet Middle School.  Here are some pure generalizations.  Obviously there are exceptions, but in most cases, this is what I observed.

High schoolers are often juggling jobs with school.  Some are balancing babies. I am used to respecting their need to have some flexibility with deadlines. Middle Schoolers want to be allowed to make their own decisions about time.  Unfortunately, many don’t have the maturity to see the consequences if they don’t use the time that they are given wisely and they procrastinate about the deadlines until they can’t possibly catch up.  Lesson:  Check with them every  day to make sure they are keeping up.

High Schoolers in our semester system get four classes a day, 84 minutes each.  They are able to focus, with breaks and variety, for the entire class. Middle Schoolers, particularly boys, can’t concentrate for much longer than 30 minutes, and they really need some physical activity in their day.  Lesson: incorporate movement into the class room through games, group work, carousel activities, etc.

Middle school kids complain and say that they don’t want to do anything that you suggest.  In High School, I grant my students the right to make these decisions, and will modify lessons to accommodate their opinions.  If you listen to Middle Schoolers’ complaints, you will never do anything fun, because they are afraid of being un-cool.  They don’t want to welcome any suggestion that comes from an adult about what they would enjoy.  Lesson:  Play the game despite the whining.  Force them to participate and then chuckle behind your hand as they laugh and thoroughly enjoy themselves.  It’s their job to be oppositional at this developmental stage.

Secondary students expect to be treated as young adults.  They are willing to accept the consequences of their actions, and they can understand what those consequences are when they are explained.  They have real, complicated lives and they appreciate when the teacher works with them to  help them do the best they can in their personal situation.  Middle School students want to be treated as young adults, but they aren’t able to clearly recognise consequences.  They are more likely to be ruled by their emotions.  Lesson: give them opportunity to voice their opinions and feelings in a respectful manner, but provide a lot of safe structure.

Secondary students are generally respectful of individuals and property.  If something goes missing, they tend to take it personally, and will work to ensure that it is returned to the owner.  Middle students have less impulse control and so things disappear around them.  They are too concerned about their status in the group to risk telling what they know.   Lesson:  lock up any valuables, don’t bring anything to the class room that you aren’t willing to have wrecked or stolen.

High schoolers know that they are responsible for their future and that working well with adults is a necessary skill.  Middle schoolers are resentful of adults and their power.  The Middle schooler needs to push the limits and challenge adults.   It is important that there are adults who can recognise the learning that happens in that challenging, while providing clear boundaries.  What the kids want to know, is where those boundaries are.  They are happiest when they can function within them.  Lesson: be honest with genuine questions, but insist on respect to everyone in the room.  Be consistent in your expectations and responses.

When I was in grade six, I had a fantastic year  and made some life-long friends.  For grade seven I went to Junior High and more lasting friends.  Several of these friends are still in my life, decades later.  I had two really great years in grades 6 and 7.  Then we moved and I went into grade eight in a new school.  It was not a good year.  It was a year of learning how to be in a new environment.  I kept looking back with bitter sweet fondness to the two great years just past, as I struggled to adapt to new ways of doing things, new people, new attitudes and a new life.

Memories of those years came to me several times over this year.  I had just had two of the best years of my career  in the high school before I accepted a job in Middle School.  I’d had classes that had bonded tightly together, and I loved going to work every day to spend time with them.  At the Middle School, I experienced the same kind of jolt I had years ago when I was a grade eight myself.  As I attempted to adapt to new methodologies, new people, and new ideas this year,  I frequently felt awkward, uncomfortable and unappreciated in the new environment.

It was a hard year. It wasn’t bad, though, it was just challenging.  I couldn’t coast on the way I’ve done things for years in the high school. I had to find new ways to deal with the new reality.  I wish I had the knowledge at the beginning of the year that I had at the end.  It was frustrating for me not to be as good  as I wanted to be (or expected to be)  in my class room.  If I have the chance to do it again, there are a lot of things I’d do differently.  I would apply all those lessons I learned.  Middle School is an energetic and amusing place to be if you know how to live on the balance point that is  the special ‘in between’ place that these students inhabit.

 

Baby boy July 2, 2011

Filed under: Pondering — Shawn L. Bird @ 2:45 pm
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I was a little surprised when a little boy arrived in my household on this day in history, many moons ago.  It wasn’t as if I hadn’t had 9 months warning of the arrival, it’s just that I was expecting another girl.  I didn’t quite know how to wrap my head around this foreign creature with the strange anatomy.  But a baby is a baby, and he managed to wiggle into my heart without too much effort.  He was pretty cute and he was a charmer from the very beginning.  Who could resist a grin like this?  Happy Birthday, baby boy. 

 

5 things July 1, 2011

Filed under: Commentary,Writing — Shawn L. Bird @ 11:32 pm
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Jane Friedman is a professor and blogger.  She was a publisher with Writers’ Digest, and is still a contributing editor for them.  Her blog is at

http://blog.writersdigest.com/norules/

Today, I’d like to direct you to this blog: http://writerunboxed.com/2011/06/24/5-things-more-important-than-talent/

Enjoy!