Shawn L. Bird

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poem- after June 25, 2014

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 11:17 am
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After he came to her bed

she threw out her make up,

grew her hair over her face,

and zipped up a blubber suit.

After he came to her bed

she faded into a gossamer ghost,

hidden in plain sight.

 

 

25 Responses to “poem- after”

  1. This is one of those poems I wish there was a “great poem” button instead of a “like” button! But I do admire your skill in capturing the essence of betrayal…you made the fracture lines in me ache with sympathy pains.

  2. onewithclay's avatar onewithclay Says:

    The best way to demonstrate great wrongness is through metaphors such as you’ve constructed here. Congratulations for your imagination’s being put to fine use.

  3. words4jp's avatar words4jp Says:

    This does deserve a great button.

  4. Very vivid. Well done.

  5. sounds like an incompatible couple. thanks for liking my recent post!

  6. syl65's avatar syl65 Says:

    Thanks Shawn. Great with a strong impact.

  7. She faded into a gossamer ghost. Beautiful. In one line you captured the reality of a woman betrayed, perhaps taken for granted, or worst, maybe she is a battered woman?

  8. Lorien's avatar Lorien Says:

    Ooooohhhhhhh. That is all.

  9. g hunter's avatar g hunter Says:

    Amazing, you describe something so un-beautiful, so beautifully.

  10. garymilstead's avatar garymilstead Says:

    Ever present in high-schools…I’m sure you see a lot of this with every class that comes through.


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