Shawn L. Bird

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she says, he says May 21, 2012

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 2:11 pm
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I’m sad, she says,

her head resting

upon his shoulder.

Words greeted by silence

that hovers

like a malevolent precipice.

Why, he says, are you choosing

to make yourself sad?

I did not choose to be sad, she says.

So then, why did you say, This is sad? he says.

What? she says.

You said, This is sad, he says.

I did not, she says.

I said, I’m sad. She says.

No. You didn’t, he says.

Yes.  I did. She says, sighing.

Silence weaves around them like water

filling between the cracks.

Now,

I’m angry, she says.

 

6 Responses to “she says, he says”

  1. findingmycreature Says:

    This really moved me….especially the she says, he says parts

  2. This was fun to read, Shawn and reminds me of my Flirting Forever: http://lscotthoughts.com/2012/01/24/flirting-forever/. Thanks so much for following me and I will do the same. I hope you continue to enjoy my writing and I look forward to reading more of yours, as well! Lauren

    • Shawn Bird Says:

      Thanks Lauren. Flirting Forever is definitely lighter in tone, but the ‘he says she says’ pattern definitely is a handy strategy that captures a lot nuances, isn’t it? Thanks for sharing the link! 🙂

      • Yes, it’s more of a lighter, fun poem, but reminded me of yours…love them both! By the way, congratulations on your publishing accomplishments, Shawn! I am now working on a publishing submission, so we’ll see…I haven’t been published, yet, but have tried. Although, simply writing has been rewarding and starting this blog 7 months ago. I’m always open to new feedback though, or suggestions…take care 🙂

      • Shawn Bird Says:

        Thanks, it’s an exciting ride!


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