Your smile
Lingers behind you
Caressing my heart.
I wander
Through my day, dreaming of
Your smile.
Can you
Feel the gaze that
Lingers behind you?
My happiness
Held in your hands
Caressing my heart.
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This is a CASCADE poem, a form attributed to Udit Bhatia. The form has no fixed rhyme or rhythm, but is arranged in stanzas that echo the model of the first stanza. Each following stanza ends in a subsequent line from the first stanza.
eg. where letters indicate a line and a grouping is a stanza, the pattern goes like this: ABC DEA FGB HIC The longer the first stanza, the longer the poem.
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This poem is submitted for the Monday Poetry Potluck. If you are visiting from the Potluck, please include the link to your own submission in your comment to make it easier for others to find you!
This poem is beautiful – I love it.
Nice one Shawn,
Brenda
LOVE this:
“Your smile
Lingers behind you
Caressing my heart.”
Such an amazing thought and emotion!
This is a great piece and the format definitely attributes it to it.
This is so sweet and I like the style of it. Cascade, huh? I may have to try that one day. I really like it. And the thought goes perfectly with Valentine’s Day.
romantic and sweet words.
yeah, when true love occurs, this is it.
perfect love entry,
have fun!
A++
Happy Valentine’s Day.
🙂
I feel the love. Nice one 🙂
wow! could feel the love.. happy valentines.. here’s mine.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/05/11/happily-tied/
Very nice and loving. Love the form. Here is my other submission: http://louisedouglas.wordpress.com/2011/02/13/to-my-love/
LOVE CAN BE SO POWERFUL YOU KNOW! NICE ONE
Ah!! So soft and simple and straight… liked it very much…
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/01/whispers-emptiness-and-soul.html
Love this! I’m still really new to actually understanding poetry forms, thanks for teaching us this one.
Oops, I forgot to include the link to mine since you already read it. http://lkramer14.wordpress.com/2011/02/12/a-sestina-from-the-heart-2/#comment-597
How lovely … smiles can indeed caress hearts!
Happy Valentines Day!
A smile can be worth millions! Well done!
“… I wander
Through my day, dreaming of
Your smile …”
Absolutely delightful to read and to remember “the times” – thank you for sharing!! becca
Like the structure and charm of this piece. It’s a sweet piece. Bravo!
Very clever layout!
And a lovely sentiment here, a smile caressing a heart..mmm
Interesting use of repetition w/out rhyme. nicely done.
It is true that we leave our energy where ever we go, negative or positive. With love energy, it is so pure and beautiful that it stays with us and thus your wonderful poem. Thank you, too, for explaining this style of poem. I was not familar with it but like it and will try it out.
Thank you, too, for visiting me! And your comments on drama. For sure, the classroom is a great place to witness dramas, especially if you teach teens who are masters at creating dramas!.
Here is my tattered view of love. Hugs, pat
http://patcegan.wordpress.com/2011/02/14/the-daisy/
Beautiful poem, applies to all the smiles that I miss, written in a wonderful format!
“Can you feel the gaze that lingers behind you” Wonderful words!