Shawn L. Bird

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poem-toothpaste love March 6, 2017

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 9:22 am
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This was your toothpaste.

The tube still holds the contours of your fist

the last squeeze you gave it.

I wrap my hand around

imagine your grip,

the skin on your hand like satin tissue

squeezing paste to scrub your teeth.

It is a long time before I can remove the lid

and squeeze the paste onto my own brush.

Remembering your hand

holding mine.


5 Responses to “poem-toothpaste love”

  1. Terryvalence Says:

    it’s amazing what powerful emotions can be evoked by the simplest of things

  2. onewithclay Says:

    This one works well both for what is said and what is unsaid. The squeezing fistmark is a well-chosen sign of incompatibility–or is it? The reader is called on to provide the back story of the separation, and there’s enough ambiguity that the story could go several ways. The ending, though, is unambiguous enough to pull at heart-sinew with a profound sense of loss.

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