Shawn L. Bird

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poem- Sapphic underwear April 11, 2015

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 8:28 pm
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A real challenge today from http://www.napowrimo.net to”compose a poem in Sapphics. These are quatrains whose first three lines have eleven syllables, and the fourth, just five. There is also a very strict meter that alternates trochees (a two-syllable foot, with the first syllable stressed, and the second unstressed) and dactyls (a three-syllable foot, with the first syllable stressed and the remainder unstressed). The first three lines consist of two trochees, a dactyl, and two more trochees. The fourth line is a dactyl, followed by a trochee.”  Well then, here’s my effort!  (Just the one quatrain. I was in a grad school class from 9 am to 4 pm today, and my brain is unwilling to do more work tonight!)

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There is nothing underwear can help, although

Lace and satin brassieres up-standing bestow

dignity of private pleasure, of secret

slitherings below.

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(This theme is completely because ‘underwear’ is such a nice dactyl, lol)

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16 Responses to “poem- Sapphic underwear”

  1. Rajiv Says:

    Very nice… I dare not close my eyes to allow my imagination to run wild

  2. Sherry Bibb Says:

    I like it! Thank you for the explanation too – I love learning those details about poetry and composition.

  3. Your poems are amazing. All new n refreshing. Love it!

  4. Wow. Wonderful work for a very difficult challenge. My head was spinning just reading your instructions. But you made it look easy. The mark of good writing.

  5. C.C. Says:

    Wow, this is fantastic! The prompt instructions were way too complicated for me to understand, much less even try! Kudos to you on a stellar sapphic 🙂 Nice dactyl underwear and all 😉

    • Thanks. When I wrote Grace Awakening, I included a quatrain in dactylic hexameter to start every chapter- it’s also a Greek meter used in epic poetry. I spent an entire summer at it. I’m pretty sure no one ever reads them when they’re reading the novel, either. lol

  6. TrewwGriTT61 Says:

    SHAWN;I have a love of the longer version! The more descriptive the better from my view! Old-fashioned I guess??? THANKS for your blogging!!

  7. the sapphics prompt was a tricky challenge


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