Shawn L. Bird

25 Responses to “poem-hollow”

1. Michael33 Says:

   January 31, 2015 at 4:31 pm

   Quite interesting and unusual poetry Shawn – I love it when I find un-ordinary writing… Thanks for sharing it with us. Hope your evening and your tomorrow are filled with beautiful moments…
   Michael

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:59 pm

     Thanks, Michael.

     I had my first big outing since breaking my ankle, and ended up sleeping 15 hours last night. I didn’t even dream any beautiful moments. I’d say they wore me out! 🙂

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2. Melody J Haislip Says:

   January 31, 2015 at 4:48 pm

   Nothing like a happy ending. 🙂

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:53 pm

     Thanks, Melody. 🙂

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3. Heartafire Says:

   January 31, 2015 at 7:59 pm

   Your blog has been nominated for the “Lovely Blog Award”, if you wish to accept it you may collect it at my blog, House of Heart.

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:51 pm

     Thanks, Hollie. As per my blog award policy posted above, I gratefully decline.

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     • Heartafire Says:

       February 1, 2015 at 4:13 pm

       I understand perfectly, I too am award blog, but in the case of Aquileana, I was very honored, thank you!
4. righteousbruin9 Says:

   January 31, 2015 at 9:52 pm

   You did not mention her heart.

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:50 pm

     Good observation.

     How do you think her heart is faring, in light of the last stanza?

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5. T.R. Sanders Says:

   January 31, 2015 at 10:55 pm

   Nice twist! 🙂

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:49 pm

     Thanks for stopping by! Glad you got the ending!

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6. narble Says:

   February 1, 2015 at 12:07 am

   Good lawd. That’s hollow. Pain, fer sher.

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:48 pm

     Indeed.

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7. Manish Ranjan Says:

   February 1, 2015 at 1:33 am

   This is such a lovely poem. Hollowness sometimes haunts but it is part of everybody’s life. It was wonderful to read this.

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:48 pm

     Thank you, Manish.

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8. hakeem Says:

   February 1, 2015 at 5:58 am

   I like how the subject of each verse gets bigger as the poem progresses, perhaps showing how it doesn’t always get better in time?

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:48 pm

     Now that’s an interesting perspective. What is happening in the last stanza, do you think?

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     • hakeem Says:

       February 5, 2015 at 12:02 pm

       I think there has been a drastic change. The tense is now in the past. So maybe a different perspective?
     • Shawn L. Bird Says:

       February 5, 2015 at 4:19 pm

       Perhaps!
9. Mish Viola Segal Foster Lempert Says:

   February 1, 2015 at 11:41 am

   powerful thoughts.

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   • Shawn L. Bird Says:

     February 1, 2015 at 2:46 pm

     Thank you Mish.

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10. layne handsen Says:

    February 1, 2015 at 11:42 am

    lovely poetry, wishing you best of luck in the year to come.

    visit me and enjoy poetry rally …thanks

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    • Shawn L. Bird Says:

      February 1, 2015 at 2:46 pm

      Thanks, Layne.

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11. dpnoble Says:

    February 2, 2015 at 3:27 pm

    Powerful and thought provoking. I’ve become a fan!

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    • Shawn L. Bird Says:

      February 2, 2015 at 5:11 pm

      Thanks, David. I look forward to seeing more of you!

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