Shawn L. Bird

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poem- apple July 29, 2014

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 2:00 pm
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When you crunch

into that apple

eyes twinkling,

cheek dimpling.

I am Eve,

and that smile,

glistening with juice,

is paradise

to go.

 

 

38 Responses to “poem- apple”

  1. Now I want an apple. Love it.

  2. Roger Turner Says:

    to be the one to taste eve’s succulence….and be the one to lick the juice from her smiling lips….would be another reason to get thrown out of eden…..but, i’d still want to be the one to taste eve’s juice.

  3. Joxua Luxor Says:

    Me Adam, this raise my spirits immensely. 🙂
    8=====D

  4. Roger Turner Says:

    LOL….I truly enjoyed the poem…and your response of Well Then….made me laugh.

  5. unfetteredbs Says:

    This is so perfectly lustful

    • It’s actually quite funny, because I was just pondering the notion that if the traditional view is that Eve got Adam kicked out of paradise, in a good relationship, if they were content with one another, then wherever they went would be paradise.

      My intention wasn’t quite the lusty metaphor that has been seized upon. lol. But hey! Whatever. 🙂

      • unfetteredbs Says:

        I have that happen to me sometimes as well…. That’s the beauty of poetry and art. Our creations take on whatever the receiver manifests 🙂

  6. starlynn27 Says:

    simple and beautiful

  7. davidprosser Says:

    What a beautiful, cheeky, fun poem.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

  8. gosh darn it, that’s exquisite!

  9. samuelbartholomew Says:

    There are some really cool things going on in this poem. Are you okay with the sexual interpretation that has been talked about? The vibe is definitely there. It’s not a bad thing necessarily, but before I noticed it I pictured something more innocent: a child being happy and biting into an apple. The mother is enjoying the moment, but she knows it cannot last because her child will grow up eventually. I wonder if “eyes twinkling” is giving off this vibe. Of course, it could be the interpretation of the Bible that says Adam and Eve’s forbidden fruit was sex. Again, the sexual undertones don’t have to be a bad thing, but once the reader has noticed them they difinitely distract from an innocent (and perhaps more meaningful) interpretation of the poem. Personally, I enjoy the latter reading more, but I like the ambiguity as well.

    • Sex isn’t the forbidden fruit in the Bible. It’s knowledge of good and evil. It’s the eating of the fruit from that tree of the knowledge of good and evil in disobedience to God’s order. That disobedience led to them being expelled from the garden i.e. paradise.

      My intent definitely didn’t have any mother/kid element to it. I was thinking that in a good relationship, paradise/happiness comes with you, so you can’t be expelled from paradise. I don’t care about more the sexual angle (I think it’s juice on the lips more than twinkle in the eye), interpretation is what the reader brings to the poem, and if that’s what they bring, that’s what they get.

      • samuelbartholomew Says:

        Yeah, juice on the lips does it for sure. I wasn’t sharing my interpretation of the bible, but there are people who believe that sex was the forbidden fruit. Nice piece though. If it gets people talking it’s something 🙂

      • No one who’s read Song of Solomon! lol

      • samuelbartholomew Says:

        I see what you meant by “to go,” as in mobile. Interesting. I figured it was something that couldn’t last, as if Paradise was the thing that would be leaving (like when they were expelled from the garden). Maybe that’s why I though about growing up and parent-child interactions. The kid grows up and things change. Of course, I do have a young daughter of 8 months, so I read her into a lot of things. Anyway, like you say, everyone gets something different out of each poem. Just thought you’d like to hear what I got out of it. Keep up the good work!

      • Thanks for sharing!

  10. I’d like a fruit basket!

  11. words4jp Says:

    Yum. I kinda prefer the apple over the biter. That is the problem with biters – they bite:)

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