Shawn L. Bird

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poem- greedy June 24, 2014

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 7:24 pm
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I want

sun on your shoulders

breeze in your hair

speed in your feet

you with

me.

 

21 Responses to “poem- greedy”

  1. Victor Terrien's avatar Victor Terrien Says:
    June 24, 2014 at 7:30 pm

    Soooo good. Well done. 🙂

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  2. Rajiv's avatar Rajiv Says:
    June 24, 2014 at 8:14 pm

    Superb piece!

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  3. JeanneMidtowns's avatar jnmdtwns Says:
    June 24, 2014 at 9:27 pm

    You got good greed:)

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  4. davidprosser's avatar davidprosser Says:
    June 24, 2014 at 10:56 pm

    Sounds like an ideal place to be.
    xxx Massive Hugs xxx

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  6. Paul Militaru's avatar Paul Militaru Says:
    June 25, 2014 at 2:52 am

    Beautiful

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  7. mezzyadamz's avatar mezzyadamz Says:
    June 25, 2014 at 4:16 am

    A concrete poem. And a perfect one that is.

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  8. AditiChandak's avatar AdiC Says:
    June 25, 2014 at 7:57 am

    Fantastic use of words!

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  9. words4jp's avatar words4jp Says:
    June 25, 2014 at 6:44 pm

    I feel like my dog could be saying this – as in “mommy get your shoes on now I want to go for a walk”!

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  10. rolltidejen's avatar rolltidejen Says:
    June 26, 2014 at 11:41 pm

    Nice. I like the way it shapes into a heart, too. Don’t know if that was intentional or not. 🙂

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