Duck:
observe the legato ease of
geese relaxing in their Vs,
or eagles, reaching out their sides
to slice the skies,
even the tiny wren flies
from tree to tree efficiently,
but you,
you flap
over-happily
like a rattlepated,
frenzied drunk,
Duck.
My boyfriend’s name is Duckie, so I just had to send him your poem. Rather ironic topic, given your name. Enjoyed. Always appreciate your dropping by my blog.
I hope your Duckie does not fly like a rattlepated drunk.
Perfectly delightful, and I’m happy the duck finally has received a poem loopily loving him.
I’m always amused by their flight.
Watching ducks is kinda like a Marx Brothers movie. Really a good observation.
Yes! lol Marx Bros is a good comparison. 🙂
I just learned the word “rattlepated.” Thanks for the poem and the education.
You may credit (as I do) http://www.rhymezone.com and its synonym generator. 🙂 (One of my favourite sites, by the way. Wonderful for finding rhymes, near-rhymes, similar sounding words, etc).
Glad to aid in vocabulary development!
Thanks for the recommendation, I’ll check it out. 🙂
Awesome sounds in this poem (legato ease/relaxing into Vs)–and funny enough, the sounds create an image. 🙂 Nicely done!
Thanks.
Fun.
Maybe add, if someone points a stick at you
Duck
🙂
lol
I love this it made me smile 🙂
😉
Have a lovely day and God bless you lots 🙂
And the same to you!
Thanks 🙂
Glad your muse is back!
lol
Well, it wasn’t far away. 😉
bird watchers
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walking with my daughter
correcting false bee sightings
hummingbird
Oh! How lovely! They do buzz like bees, though. 🙂
I just love the flow.
I keep tweeking it. Poor duck.
My grandfather used to say:
“If the ocean was whiskey,
And I was a duck,
I’m swim to the bottom,
And never come up.”
lol
It’s a beautiful poem!
Glad you enjoyed it.
This is a fun poem. I very much like your easy rhyming, not always end stopped.
You know that the ‘modern’ poem doesn’t have those ‘horrible’ constrictions of end rhyme and set rhythm…
((cough))
Thoroughly modern me, S/ 😉
Strangely enough, your last name is “Bird”….so, I found the ending interesting.
“frenzied drunk,
Duck.” ?
My last name is Bird? Whaaa? Seriously?
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😉