Shawn L. Bird

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poem- the other place November 9, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 8:52 pm
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I’m making this up as I go along

You in the other place

Singing echoing off the walls

in an imaginary  paradise.

You in the other place

Eden entwined between

sheets and dreams

making it up as we go along

 

15 Responses to “poem- the other place”

  1. kregianmiral Says:

    Is this about a long distance relationship or maybe something near to that? I can sense a feeling of longing & sadness about the difference in location. As always, very well written, simple, direct, short & concise. It is always a pleasure to read your creations. Keep safe & stay awesome! 🙂

  2. timthepoet Says:

    Interesting are there more than one person you repeat ‘you in the other place’ twice? Entwined between sheets, does this other person spend a lot of time in bed? Is it a romantic relationship? So many questions unanswered.

  3. davidprosser Says:

    Making it up as we go along is what life’s all about isn’t it Shawn.?
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

  4. Annie's Muse Says:

    This is so the story of my life … and … still making it up day by day … Stunning!

  5. Annie's Muse Says:

    Reblogged this on ANNIE'S MUSE and commented:
    I love Shawn’s poetry. This one speaks to me on a very personal level…my life is a series of making it up as I go … one day at a time.

  6. Nina Kaytel Says:

    I love this. My mind is spitting out so many ideas and I get it. Life is not a structure, it is a fabricated set of rules all made up as society changes thus we are all just winging it. I’m sure that wasn’t what you meant.

    • lol
      To be honest, I was playing with words and phrases in this one. The juxtaposition of words and phrases leaves enough gaps for many, many meanings to be discovered. Your interpretation definitely works.

  7. Reblogged this on The Dread Pirate Buttercup and commented:
    I am so excited about the Awesome Poems and poets I have found since beginning this Blog a week ago. I feel like if I had only know sooner. Then I think ahh yes but you are here now. So enjoy with me. One of my favorites of the day.


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