Shawn L. Bird

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haiku-water park July 24, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 2:53 pm
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At the water park

Small children dance and shake like

robins in puddles


10 Responses to “haiku-water park”

  1. navaara Says:

    That is exactly what it looks like at a water park.

  2. pi314chron Says:

    Very nice image but the haiku would be stronger if you can rewrite to avoid using the simile.


  3. Adriannetu Says:

    I read your Haiku. Great imagery! Read one of mine:

  4. trixijinx Says:

    An excellent comparison, I love it! I was at the water park yesterday with my little niece. She ran up to me and exclaimed that she saw “so many rainbows in the water!” It was adorable.

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