You stand silently apart
You hover on the edges
distinct
observant
I mingle like sugar in water
wondering
wishing
longing
to draw you
into my arms
to hold you
to anchor you.
But you don’t know where
those hands have been.
You seek a quiet place
to find a peaceful oasis
for the discomfort of that skin
for the ramble of those thoughts
for the torture of that crowd
I stand apart
and watch you pull yourself
in pieces
I’m laughing and chatting
and wishing I could be enough
to give you courage
strength
faith in yourself,
but I’m not.
No matter how much
my heart is full to bursting
with wanting it.
You have to be
enough
alone.
Shawn L. Bird 
Lovely blog!
Maybe we can follow each other? x
Absolutely. Thanks for coming by!
Beautiful! =)
Thanks
Really like your line “I mingle like sugar in water”
Thanks. Couldn’t think of a simila for standing outside though. Perhaps the drinking straw?
Perhaps a bit too strong an image, but an eye watching the sugar settle?
but it doesn’t settle, it spins until it disappears…
Ahhh… my apologies! I like that much better than what I was envisioning 🙂
lol Envisioning is what makes poetry interesting…
Hmmm. Somehow i was picturing lemon on the edge of the glass. “You stand silently apart
You hover on the edges
distinct
observant”
While you mingle in the water…
and occasionally sour and make the speaker pucker up! lol Yes. Excellent suggestion!
I can relate to this on many levels. i know someone who has to find that peace within in himself – before he can expect to find it with others. You described this beautifully and perfectly.
It’s about mental health, too. Sometimes they can’t, and those who love them can’t do anything but hope for the best and love them through it.
oh yes!
wow!!! wow!!!
These lines of yours captured my imagination:
You seek a quiet place
to find a peaceful oasis
for the discomfort of that skin
for the ramble of those thoughts
for the torture of that crowd
what was your inspiration for this poem? Incredible! and so awesomely written poem.
Say, don’t forget to check out my new poem I just posted…It’s Moon crust acid (2045). 😉
The inspiration is observation.
Nice. 🙂
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I love this poem, I can relate while still pondering of what the author felt when composing this. Kudos!
Glad you enjoyed it.
As I read this I couldn’t tell if you were speaking to yourself or another – either way, works beautifully.
and that is the mystery of poetry. Like most writing, 50% comes from the writer and 50% comes from the reader, and where the words and the eyes meet, a new story is formed, distinct from the writer’s…
This touched me in a way I can’t even begin to explain. The universe obviously needed and wanted me to see this breath-taking piece! Thank you for sharing your gift!
I’m glad to know you received something good from it. Take care.
u said> “It’s about mental health, too. Sometimes they can’t, and those who love them can’t do anything but hope for the best and love them through it.””” an i say so agreed,,,magnificant thought process on this subjekt, couldnt have read my mind better today or again helped it in its way! lol.have a great one….Q
Thanks. Have a wonderful one yourself!
Hello Shawn, I was really moved by your poem. I can definitely relate to the message behind it (which I feel is one of unrequited love). I found your writing very elegant, yet honest. Enjoyed it!
I wasn’t thinking of unrequited love myself, but the interpretation belongs as much to the reader as to the poet, and whatever you take is valid. 🙂 I’m glad you liked it.
Your piece was really moving! loved it! 🙂
Thanks.
There is depth and intellectual emotion here, enough to draw us in and feel and think with you.
Thanks
welcome.