Shawn L. Bird

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us July 9, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 11:54 am
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I lost myself

searching for you.

I faded away

on filaments of fog;

I was ephemeral

but you were there

all along: a tall

strong fortress.

Grey walls

forbidding

forboding

forth coming

for nobody seen.

My cloud self

enwraps you,

enclosing us,

and we become

mystery.

 

32 Responses to “us”

  1. Noora's avatar Noora Says:

    “My cloud self
    enwraps you,
    enclosing us,
    and we become
    mystery.”
    Awesome!!

  2. Ionia Froment's avatar ioniamartin Says:

    This is completely beautiful!

  3. Chris Nelson's avatar Chris Nelson Says:

    This is a beautiful tell of losing self in love that many can relate to. Great job! Now tell the phoenix story of coming back.

  4. Chris Nelson's avatar Chris Nelson Says:

    Reblogged this on Feeding your imagination and commented:
    A beautiful poem anyone can relate to.

  5. Samantha's avatar Samantha Says:

    I like the rhythm & imagery you used in this piece.

  6. love the ending 🙂

  7. keelymyles's avatar keelymyles Says:

    oooo000OOO000oooo…… Love, love LOVE!

  8. quarksire's avatar quarksire Says:

    very kewl s bird frum q bird:).

  9. words4jp's avatar words4jp Says:

    the last sentence – stunning. so lyrical and magical.

  10. leamuse's avatar leamuse Says:

    I love the imagery!

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  11. wordrhythm's avatar aks87 Says:

    Hey, thanks for stopping by my blog – http://wordsandswords.wordpress.com/2013/07/10/nataraj/
    wow the lines you have used…truly gripping!


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