Shawn L. Bird

7 Responses to “sea sleep”

1. fhhakansson Says:

   December 7, 2011 at 4:44 am

   Makes me want to go on a vacation somewhere warm with a clear sea where I can rest on the beach for hours without worry.

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2. Morning Says:

   December 7, 2011 at 8:40 am

   love it,

   i feel like embraced by sea of sleep, cool feel of it.
   🙂

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   • Shawn Bird Says:

     December 7, 2011 at 10:42 pm

     When my husband has me in his arms, I think it’s cool that I can feel him fall asleep. Suddenly his body relaxes, and he dissolves into the mattress….

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3. Kayla Says:

   December 7, 2011 at 6:39 pm

   I really like this poem!!! XD Especially the line, “You collapse under it like a sand castle,” since readers are able to visually see a sand castle crumpling underneath the wave.

   Also, I think the last line is really effective because the word “fade” kind of conjures up a bunch of meanings. I’m not entirely sure if sand fades in water (chemistry is not my strong point :P), but the line kind of makes me think of all the events of the day fading away. Which is probably the purpose of the poem in the first place. The next day is a new day to build a new sand castle, and if it fails, it’ll be washed away, so you can build a new one the next day. *stating the obvious*

   It’s a really awesome image! Glad I read this XD

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   • Shawn Bird Says:

     December 7, 2011 at 9:25 pm

     Thanks Kayla- I was thinking of the castle fading into the sea, as opposed to the sand itself. Castle fades into sand. All the works are erased into essential elements…

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4. The Orange Tree Says:

   December 8, 2011 at 9:05 am

   love this,

   brilliant piece of poetry.

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5. SiNA Says:

   December 10, 2011 at 12:07 am

   I could just close my eyes and feel what you have depicted here…very intensely! very vividly! wow…these are very powerful words 🙂
   dissolving into the depths…AMAZING

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