It’s gratifying to go back through a manuscript completed ages ago, and find yourself giggling at scenes you’d completely forgotten about. As I’m editing Grace Awakening Myth this evening, I came across this scene, and I thought you might enjoy it, too.
Please note that this is a draft version, I can already see several things to fine tune! 🙂
Ben is backstage, preparing for a band concert. One of his friends took dance to meet a girl he likes, and he’s about to perform in a quartet dance number as part of the concert. Ben is narrating.
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I could sense Grace in the audience as we set up the stage for the band concert. She must have come early with Christie. The tenuous ribbons of connection between us floated invisibly in the air, but I could feel them. She had been ignoring me at school, but her mind had been busy thinking about me. She was opening possibility, and the awareness made my heart soar.
Her presence was calling to the music in me. Surely, the other players would be captivated by it as well. The concert was going to be a good one.
Ryan was shivering in a corner.
“What’s wrong?”
“I think I’m going to be sick.”
“It’s just nerves,” I said. “You’ve played concerts plenty of times. It’s always fine.”
He stared at me like I was a moron. “I’m wearing a spandex unitard under this band uniform.”
I laughed, and as the picture seered my brain, I laughed harder.
He sent me a withering look and the tears started. They stung my eyes and rolled down my cheeks, but I couldn’t stop laughing.
Paul came over. “What’s so funny?”
“Ryan,” I sputtered. “Spandex.”
Paul wrinkled his nose. “Ooh, nasty. Nothing is worth that, Bro. What were you thinking? On the other hand,” he glanced to the wings, “Georgia is looking mighty fine this evening.”
She was. Her hair tumbled loosely in waves almost to her waist. She was wearing a beige unitard that disappeared at a distance. Her curves were magnificent.
Ryan sighed. “It is sooooo worth it. Excuse me,” he muttered to us, and went to stand with her.
Her smile lit her face as he came near. It made my heart warm.
Paul looked around for Tanis, and saw her standing off to the side watching Ryan and Georgia. “Do you think she’s jealous?”
I shrugged, “Maybe a little. Don’t let it worry you. Have you seen J-Roy yet?”
He looked around, “There he is, at the back in black. Oh my. Is that the same thing Ryan is wearing?” He started to snicker.
I sucked back the guffaw that started to explode out of me. J-Roy was clad in a black unitard. A hood covered his trademark lion’s mane of tawny hair. The only skin that showed was on his hands, feet, and face. J-Roy is athletic. He stood tall, his body rippled with muscular definition. He looked fantastic. “Oh, poor Ryan,” I groaned.
Ryan’s slightly paunchy belly and sloped shoulders were not the optimal build for a unitard.
Paul smirked at me, “Maybe Ryan hopes the black will be slimming?”
I started to shake, pursing my lips tightly.
Misty floated by in a glowing euphoria, with frequent glances over to J-Roy. “Doesn’t he look like some kind of Greek god?” she murmured to me.
I pondered a lecture on over-generalization, but with another look to J-Roy I had to acknowledge that he did, in fact, bear a strong resemblance to some of my relatives.