Shawn L. Bird

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poem- feeling beachy November 18, 2020

Filed under: poem,Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 10:18 am
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Crashing waves

Splashing children

Deep thinking trickles like sand

I’m seeking peace:

waves wash over me.




Demo cinquain poem for class today. Kids chose theme of beach, and I wrote a line with a different poetic device in each: alliteration, assonance, consonance, onomatopoeia, internal rhyme. Turns out, it sounds better in reverse, so that’s the version you see here.






3 Responses to “poem- feeling beachy”

  1. Haha, interesting that you were able to just reverse it and make it sound better.

  2. Yes, and I pointed that out to them. They have to write them in order with the labels (they’re already on the hand-out) but they can re-arrange them later if they want. I explained that sometimes the editor/publisher requires certain edits to your writing, but you can always keep a version you like to re-use when your rights revert! πŸ˜‰

  3. This is beautifully composed ❀

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