I know you love me
because you left this grieving heart
the last crumpet.
Again.
.
.
.
But if you’re reading, darlin’
I wish you’d worn your kilt today.
It wasn’t much to ask, was it?
Just sayin’.
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Shawn L. Bird 
Yup!!
😉
Wow. This one is both lovely and it has a strong bite. Well done.
Thank you.
What count is this? I’m intrigued… I’m counting 5-8-4-2
Sounds right.
I’m generally a haiku purist- 5-7-5, but in English it’s allowed flexibility, and occasionally I take it. This poem originally was only 3 lines, but after I finished and it was in the queue, named and ready, I recalled that last week I also got the last crumpet, so added a line as emphasis. Now it’s 4 lines it’s really out of the haiku bounds (should I add another and turn it into a tanka?) I decided I didn’t care. 🙂 If someone can call something a ‘sonnet’ that isn’t 14 lines long or in iambic pentameter, why can’t I have a four line haiku? lol
(Though to be honest, I hate those so called ‘sonnets’) 😉
Interesting. I usually just reform it to become something similar, as in 3-5-3, 2-3-2, or 1-2-1 if I’m feeling particularly succinct. I still love it! I was just curious. Regardless, it’s beautifully written…
When I have kids do haiku in school I am really strict- it MUST fit the 5-7-5 rule. But that’s mostly because they have difficulty counting syllables (some don’t hear them at all) and so the lesson is more about syllables than poetry. 🙂
Anything, for a grieving heart.
Anything, most of the time, actually. 😉
how did you develop the skill of writing haiku?
practice, I suppose?
i think i should try it. Any advice?
The formula is 3 lines. Syllable count totals 17, generally 5 on first line, 7 on second, 5 on third. Traditionally they are nature based, but contain a profound truth about life. Generally, one starts by following the rules, and with practice, later breaks them a bit. 😉
thank you very much for this. i will challenge myself and share the results with you
Have fun
sure proof!
🙂
Yes, why not wear your kilt today darlin?
Yup. Still asking! Grrr.
Lovely. Yes, sometimes it is what people do more than what they say the speaks volumes. Kindest Regards Cheryle
Thanks, Cheryle!