Shawn L. Bird

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Poem-making love July 21, 2013

Filed under: Poetry — Shawn L. Bird @ 12:14 am
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I make you.

Word by word

I write you.

Stroke by stroke

I paint you.

View by view

I see you.

What I say

is what you are

So

I make you kind

I make you good

I make you loving

and so

you are.

.

.

This explores a similar concept to Patricia McGerr’s “Eight Cow Wife.”  How you treat your spouse will reflect back on you.  If you complain all the time, you’re going to be focusing on the negative until that’s all you can see.  So don’t.  Your focus creates your reality.  Live the relationship you want to have.

 

 

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39 Responses to “Poem-making love”

  1. meonomous Says:

    really like this 🙂

  2. ur'damage Says:

    love this piece…
    thanks

  3. This is very interesting!! I like this piece and the concept. WI

  4. ahhh. sigh of contentment.

  5. Mike Says:

    Splendidly original.

  6. paulessick Says:

    Reblogged this on My Blog snuppy.

  7. words4jp Says:

    I very much like this.

  8. navaara Says:

    I can easily see this be many things: from art of all kinds; children; and ourselves. Even in photography, which is my art of choice, if I focus on the negative around me, then that is what is going to show in my pictures. My pictures will not be what I like, or even think good. If I feel good about where I am, then my pictures will show this. I have tried to explain this to my sister who was dabbling in photography for a time, but I think she thought it was too hard. What really sucks is she has a much better environment, as far as I am concerned, for photos: she lives in upper California, near Big Bear (?), whereas I live in the concrete of Las Vegas, and am not easily moved by anything I see. I love nature, to me nature is positive and life giving, thus I feel my photos always seemed better when I was near nature; whether in San Diego or Georgia.

  9. Agree with the lesson and love the way you have constructed it. I was discussing this very concept 2 weeks ago in a small group course.

  10. katriter Says:

    I love this idea!! When we write we do make love to our words and ideas.

  11. Meka Says:

    Very nice! Ya know…you’re pretty good 🙂

  12. C.J. Black Says:

    Thanks for dropping by Shawn, Love the – live the relationship line, have being practising it for the past 40 years & it works – for me anyway.
    Chris.

  13. […] Making Love   I make you. Word by word I write you. Stroke by stroke I paint you. View by view I see you. […]

  14. This works well for creating characters and their interactions.

  15. matteokhan Says:

    This is absolutely beautiful ❤

  16. Jen Says:

    So so true and a needed reminder today. So so needed!

  17. YESYESYESYESYES! Can I just say yes? YES!

  18. keelymyles Says:

    This is a beautiful way to love….


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