Shawn L. Bird

Original poetry, commentary, and fiction. All copyrights reserved.

A chorus line July 1, 2013

Two horses, white and bay

stand companionably

munching their lunches.

Atop the bay,

upon each vertebrae,

perches a bitty bird,

observing the world:

A small flock aligned

along an equine

telephone line.

The white mare,  back bare,

munches, and muses

on popularity’s

winners and losers.

.

.

Coming home from work the other day, I looked into a field and was amused to see this sight.  I wish I’d had my camera with me, but since I didn’t, here’s a picture made from words for you. 😉

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18 Responses to “A chorus line”

  1. Mike Says:

    I accuse you of having too much fun writing this Ms. Bird! You’ve gathered every tonal trick in the book, liberally sprinkled lyrical resonance then seasoned with wit before serving to us unsuspecting beggars a banquet fit for a King. Bravo.

  2. Mike Says:

    Ohhh – Shawn fancies Shelley! Great taste.

  3. summerstommy2 Says:

    The last lines about ‘winners and losers’ reminded me of a race horse I have a share in who sadly for me is more loser than winner.

  4. matrixilluminos Says:

    very nicely expressed, and I really like your perspective- namely, the subject your perception searches out

  5. RoSy Says:

    No photograph needed.
    You painted a great picture of what you saw.

  6. Amirh Says:

    I love this poem, especially the “near-rhyme” and subject. And thank you so much for liking “Cicadan Love Call.”

  7. smilingtoad Says:

    Masterful use of language! In love with your poetry!

  8. this is really cool, I like the flow of the last part where you start with ‘the white mare’, it’s pleasing to the ears when you read it aloud.

    • Thanks. It’s a little tricky playing with rhyme while using irregular meters. I think it is best read aloud, for sure. 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it. I was really pleased to discover brown horses are called bays. It was very helpful! 😉

  9. windhound Says:

    Many thanks for finding and following dragonshades and above all for introducing me to your writing.


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